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Monday, April 16, 2007

Autobiography Draft One

I was bone in a sentimental fall;however, I am a optimistic person. My family is very warm. My father is graduated from 體專 , so he is very good at sport, and so do I. My mother is a fashion woman and isn't old-maidish. I like to talk to her what I did at school and my friend.
I also have two brothers, my older brother is very clever, he always teach me what I don’t understand. My young has a lively fancy. I always find something special from his word. I love my family very much.

I like to do some sports in weekends. Always in Saturday morning, I go to school with my friends to do exercise. I was in basketball team before and our team always did a good job. I also like to do some cards and adornments by myself in free time and I always be admired by some people. I enjoy it. I want to be a famous article in the future and have my own brand.

4 Comments:

Blogger :V,瀞 ”婷* said...

he always teach
→he always teaches

4:02 AM  
Blogger 平井" said...

1.My mother is a fashion woman and isn't old-maidish.
-->把and換成but

2.My young has a lively fancy.
-->用my young好像有點奇怪
建議可以用My younger brother或The younger

7:51 AM  
Blogger GIGI said...

he always teach me→teaches

I like to do some sports in weekends.→ in→on

12:57 AM  
Blogger 郭包子 said...

he always teach teach 要加es喔 
寫的很不錯耶!
我喜歡看你的文章~
因為短所以省時XD

5:19 AM  

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