Tips for Staying Healthy draf1
There are some important ways to stay healthy. First of all, drinking water instead of drink. It is said that water is the best drink in the world. Also, you have to do exercise as often as possible. Killed two birds with one stone, doing exercise can stay healthy and lose weight, too. Third, going to bed early and getting up early, we have to let our body take a break at night and have a regular life. If you lead your life with these tips, you must have a healthy body and happy life.

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we have to let our body take a break at night and have a regular life.
we 要用you our要用your
一慣性一慣性啊~老師在講你有沒有在聽? (丟筆)
"Third, going to bed early and getting up early,"
early重複了,可以改成going to bed and getting up early
we和our要改成you和your
寫的不錯呀~~還用了諺語呢!
把drink改成beverages比較好
降才能讓單字不重複..
讚唷~還用諺語耶~
going to bed [ early ] and getting up [ early ]重複到了~
改一下ㄅ
其它●●●○○給你3個圈
drinking water instead of drink.沒有動詞
寫的很不錯!
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